NJPride23
07-22-17, 08:56 AM
Hello everyone,
For my officer application, I am required to hand write a 100 word statement on why I want to be a Marine Officer. This is what I have so far:
As a proud American citizen, I want to first and foremost serve my country with honor and distinction. I also want to accept the challenge of leading the world’s finest fighting force, the United States Marine Corps. Throughout the years, the Marine Corps has distinguished itself, and it has earned the reputation of being the few and the proud. If the Marines are the few and the proud, then Marine Officers must be truly exceptional. I want to take on that challenge of leading Marines, and carry on that proud tradition of sacrifice that has been made from past Marines.
Any critique or any suggestions on how to improve it is greatly appreciated!
For my officer application, I am required to hand write a 100 word statement on why I want to be a Marine Officer. This is what I have so far:
As a proud American citizen, I want to first and foremost serve my country with honor and distinction. I also want to accept the challenge of leading the world’s finest fighting force, the United States Marine Corps. Throughout the years, the Marine Corps has distinguished itself, and it has earned the reputation of being the few and the proud. If the Marines are the few and the proud, then Marine Officers must be truly exceptional. I want to take on that challenge of leading Marines, and carry on that proud tradition of sacrifice that has been made from past Marines.
Any critique or any suggestions on how to improve it is greatly appreciated!