Zrobe95
08-20-12, 09:47 PM
Hello Marines,
I am applying for the NROTC scholarship and there are a couple of essays that need to be written. I am going to post what I have written so far and would very much like your input on what I should tweak and what should be added. The limit is 2500 characters and this is at 1599, I still have work to do but want some input.
Thank you,
Zach
For me, joining the military is more than just molding myself into a better individual. I’ve always wanted to be a protector of this great nation and I see no better way to go about that than as a Marine Officer. Being held to a higher standard and leading the best fighting force America has to offer in order to protect and serve her citizens is something I will take great pride in. The reason for choosing the Marine Corps over the Army, Navy, or Air Force is simply for the esprit de Corps, the sense of belonging in that special band of brothers, the few and the proud. The facts are plain and simple, Marines die but the Marine Corps will live on and so will the deceased, through the men and women who proudly wear that Eagle, Globe, and Anchor today and into the future. Since November 10th 1775 the men of the Marine Corps have fought, bled, and died for our freedoms so we can live peaceful lives without fear. It is my duty and privilege to have the opportunity to live up to their legacies and be the best leader of Marines I can be, to help those who cannot help themselves as they did.
I do not simply want a "life you can hang your hat on". I want to be apart of history, leading men into the fray only to emerge stronger more established individuals, men who would be proud to fight along side me. To be the first Marine pilot in my family is my goal, the start of a tradition . My kids and grand kids will be part of a noble tradition that I had the honor of starting, they will remember me even when i'm gone for what I have accomplished throughout my career as a Marine Officer.
I am applying for the NROTC scholarship and there are a couple of essays that need to be written. I am going to post what I have written so far and would very much like your input on what I should tweak and what should be added. The limit is 2500 characters and this is at 1599, I still have work to do but want some input.
Thank you,
Zach
For me, joining the military is more than just molding myself into a better individual. I’ve always wanted to be a protector of this great nation and I see no better way to go about that than as a Marine Officer. Being held to a higher standard and leading the best fighting force America has to offer in order to protect and serve her citizens is something I will take great pride in. The reason for choosing the Marine Corps over the Army, Navy, or Air Force is simply for the esprit de Corps, the sense of belonging in that special band of brothers, the few and the proud. The facts are plain and simple, Marines die but the Marine Corps will live on and so will the deceased, through the men and women who proudly wear that Eagle, Globe, and Anchor today and into the future. Since November 10th 1775 the men of the Marine Corps have fought, bled, and died for our freedoms so we can live peaceful lives without fear. It is my duty and privilege to have the opportunity to live up to their legacies and be the best leader of Marines I can be, to help those who cannot help themselves as they did.
I do not simply want a "life you can hang your hat on". I want to be apart of history, leading men into the fray only to emerge stronger more established individuals, men who would be proud to fight along side me. To be the first Marine pilot in my family is my goal, the start of a tradition . My kids and grand kids will be part of a noble tradition that I had the honor of starting, they will remember me even when i'm gone for what I have accomplished throughout my career as a Marine Officer.